Should I get drunk and spam FH while I am drinking?

[Imgormiel]

And what subjects would you like me to write about while I am doing it?

Two beers down, 3 shots...it could happen

 

[CorNokZ]

Drinking alone infront of the computer on a friday, let alone doing shots alone, is just sad..

1) Log off FH
2) Drink some more
3) Log on MySpace
4) Write poetry
5) Remember to copyright it all

 

[Lamp]

In such situations ALWAYS think: What would Rod Stewart do?

 

[Imgormiel]

Drinking alone infront of the computer on a friday, let alone doing shots alone, is just sad..

1) Log off FH
2) Drink some more
3) Log on MySpace
4) Write poetry
5) Remember to copyright it all

That gets a rep for its satire and sarcasm 4tw

Was thinking of writing something earlier, but after thinking about it, it sounded like an angst teenager/twentysomething and therefore I decided not to go with the plan

 

[CorNokZ]

Don't quote me.. All my posts are copyrighted

kkthxbb

 

[Imgormiel]

Don't quote me.. All my posts are copyrighted

kkthxbb

I suggest you look at English law on copyright first before you make such acerbic comments like that. I've been over this with you all before. You can make a request if you had the nous to ask me for the purposes of asking me why you want to use it ie permission. But you didn't or perhaps won't. Not my problem if you won't do that.

My posts aren't copyrighted, but my work is, there is a difference...
Recognition of such gets you a long way And you have just got ur rep from me so stfu ;p

 

[Bugz]

I had a read of your latest posting on the Creative Section Imgormiel.

I think you have a nice writing style in how you formulate sentences & how you approach topics but you have a massive habit of running a commentary on an issue, rather than telling a story. Because of this, it's hard to draw the reader in and to make them feel as passionate as you do about your writing.

 

[Everz]

Go for it, i'm in on a Friday also (damn you bills..!), so get pissed all, wahey!.

 

[Imgormiel]

I had a read of your latest posting on the Creative Section Imgormiel.

I think you have a nice writing style in how you formulate sentences & how you approach topics but you have a massive habit of running a commentary on an issue, rather than telling a story. Because of this, it's hard to draw the reader in and to make them feel as passionate as you do about your writing.

I gotta say Bugz, you have something there. But ask yourself, do you think that I like writing that way? Ask yourself why I am writing that way. It's not for me that I write that way. But then there are levels in the way that I write which are not obvious, but mainly to ingratiate the intelligence of those that potentially might read as opposed to being just overt with what I am writing.

Although in my way I am being overt, just depends on how you read it, how you perceive what and how I write and perhaps why I am writing it. Some things stand on their own, that's your judgement on whether I achieve that. I've had quite alot of people message me and say in person that my work is good. I like your constructive criticism. I like the fact that you have had the balls to say what you said. But it's not written in the quite the way you have stated. But a nice observation nonetheless

I'll quote a famous anecdote : All that we see or seem, is but a dream within a dream

I hate plagiarism, but this seems apt. Sorry.

 

[Bugz]

Of course it is just an opinion of your work and I only based it on my own experience. You do flow your sentences well and you use some nice little unique numbers, such as "A soul to human re-integration consultant. A soul-gynaecologist to you and me," which sound effective because they aren't forced.

But i just think, if you are looking at mainstream writing for the entertainment/involvement of others, you need to open your writing up to different directions -> emotion, character and so on. Also don't be afraid to expand your sentences a little. I have a massive habit of opening them too much, you have a habit of opening yours too little.

Take: "It seems that the penultimate top floor was for the saints and revered angels. The floor below that was for people like the good doctor himself. Those were most favoured by the boss or god if you like." You state a fact and you end it with a full-stop. You state the next fact and again abruptly end it with a full stop. Some kind of direction in between this commentary would make the reader more curious and more interested.

Edit - Ofcourse - this all depends on how you view an epilogue!

 

[cHodAX]

Why not, I often do it and I might join you as I just opened the Sailor Jerry's

 

[Imgormiel]

Of course it is just an opinion of your work and I only based it on my own experience. You do flow your sentences well and you use some nice little unique numbers, such as "A soul to human re-integration consultant. A soul-gynaecologist to you and me," which sound effective because they aren't forced.

But i just think, if you are looking at mainstream writing for the entertainment/involvement of others, you need to open your writing up to different directions -> emotion, character and so on. Also don't be afraid to expand your sentences a little. I have a massive habit of opening them too much, you have a habit of opening yours too little.

Take: "It seems that the penultimate top floor was for the saints and revered angels. The floor below that was for people like the good doctor himself. Those were most favoured by the boss or god if you like." You state a fact and you end it with a full-stop. You state the next fact and again abruptly end it with a full stop. Some kind of direction in between this commentary would make the reader more curious and more interested.

Edit - Ofcourse - this all depends on how you view an epilogue!

Short sharp sentences 4tw bugs I had tooth ache also when i wrote that and i wanted to finish that in hurry as it was xmas eve afternoon - not that is an excuse. I just wanted to portray an idea of heaven that was redeeming and that hadn't been done before. Ok, it might not have worked. I know it wasn't as good as the previous pieces with regard to the whole. But I am afraid that I have only repeated the same mistake that everyone does with epilogues. That is that it is a lesser part and then confused that idea with heaven and then confused that idea with the original character and how he would view death. Yet only exaggerate the idea of heaven with his character and how he could redeem himself in a humanistic way.

That idea might not have worked. I wasn't entirely sure whether it would. I was happy enough to release it. I may not be happy with the outcome now, but I can live with it enough that I was happy enough for everyone else to see. I wanted closure on the story.

I am currently being hounded from a friend to close the footy preseason monologue. That's not a priority atm, but I will and yea it will be very much in that humorous same light the other two were. In a few months (you may breathe a sigh of relief or not ) I am stopping with poetry and monologues for good and then starting on my book.

I will leave you with the rest of your thoughts on that matter

 

[old.Tohtori]

Bugz, if you want to give some more feedback, here's a section of one of the stories i'm working on. Nothing conclusive, just a style input in this "drunk and writingly" thread

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His brain was trying to leave his skull, his stomach was trying to turn itself inside out and his mouth tasted like something died in there after a hard nights work of pouring as much sand down his throat as possible. He was having a so called “hang over”. In the past the term meant that something was left over or indeed survived, a description which worked rather well with his current condition.

The train stopped with a hiss and several clangs, before letting the people out in a flood of chatter and mobile ringtones. He opened his eyes and closed them tight again as the light above attacked every nerve in his head. Slowly he managed to part his eyelids and take a look around. Even with his limited deductive skills; a couple of trains, several people with bags of various sorts and the distinct smell of urine were enough to tell him he was at a train platform.

He slowly lifted to a sitting position, holding his head with one hand. A passing traveler dropped a half smoked cigarette on his way to catch a train. He picked it up and took a long draw from it and as soon as he did, he frowned and flicked the cigarette away.

‘Ngh…menthol.’

 

[Ch3tan]

Drinking alone infront of the computer on a friday, let alone doing shots alone, is just sad..

1) Log off FH
2) Drink some more
3) Log on MySpace
4) Write poetry
5) Remember to copyright it all

Can't rep, but if I could, I would be loving that post right now.

 

[cHodAX]

All I wanted was the love of a good woman.

 

[cHodAX]

All I wanted was the love of a good woman.

Well, not even a good one, any old one would have done.

 

[cHodAX]

Well, not even a good one, any old one would have done.

Slap a wig on a 'Speak your Weight' machine and I would be happy.

 

[Raven]

I may or may not sue you all for possible infringement of copyright that I may or may not own!

 

[Imgormiel]

Too late, I am almost drunk and I am not argueing with no-one now, errrrrr that whiskey did me in

 

[Roo Stercogburn]

All I wanted was the love of a good sheep.

Fixed for accuracy.

 

[fettoken]

You drunken bastards *hick*

 

[CorNokZ]

So fuck! Did wou get drunbk and write shit dog? cause id' love to not read it!