Please give feedback on this song

[j00ster]

Ok guys it happened again, i got really bored and this time i came up with something myself. Its kinda weird because its not normaly the thing i would normaly come up with , its kinda punkish, busted eat ur heart out tbh.

Well as i said i appreciated everyones comments before good and bad so if you wouldnt mind giving it a listen and letting me know what you think and yes i know the vocals could be better but its just me voice!,

Ive had to put them in 2 seperate files , dont ask why , cheers!

Oh and the lyrics do just about mean something , its about being slated for getting no-where in life and having no ambition (falling into a routine of nothing where days just go on and on), and a few other things i think thats it.

Thx again

Links:

1. Intro: http://www.riffstation.com/audio/npintro.mp3

2. Main song: http://www.riffstation.com/audio/npmain.mp3

 

[DavidH]

Well, its not perfect But you're definitely on the right track. I got a feeling that the vocals wasn't perfectly synced with the song itself on some places. Other then that, good work and keep it up!

 

[j00ster]

yeah i didnt spend that long on the vocals , i think perhaps ill spend a good day re-doing them , i need to get a pop sheild for the mic

 

[Commandment]

voclas good, lyrics good. turn the knob on ur ds2 or wotever a little bit to the left and i think we have a winner! givf more more even if im the only one who likes it ! it takes balls , and i think it rox :>

solo reminded me of ted theodore logan! cant say why tho hehehe :>

 

[Commandment]

btw wot would be your main musical influnences?

 

[j00ster]

hehe great glad you liked it , lol at the ted theodore logan thing .

So do you think the guitar output is too high? or everything needs turning down a notch?

thx again for feedback

 

[j00ster]

All sorts of things really, really like bands like iced earth iron maiden, lots of 80's rock and metal , hair metal ftw

cheesier stuff is good too, queen , fleetwood mac i like too lots of stuff

 

[Commandment]

ye just a small bit on the distortion.. u got a good singing voice.. well each to his own and i think its good. so a liddul bit down on distortion. record more

 

[Bugz]

Touch those vocals up a tiny bit, mainly the area where you hang the notes (probably to do with the recording as someone already stated) and it would be very good.

 

[Mikah75]

its ok
the electric guitar solo was very good

 

[j00ster]

Ok thanks for the comments everyone. Ive just updated a new version of the main song which ive redone some of the vocals and dubbed down the guitar, let me know if its any better. Cheers

 

[old.Tohtori]

Pretty basic, guitar play that you'd hear from any 7th grader, with some forced singing on top and not to mention drumfills used like their candy in a christmastree.

Sorry, but it needs a visit from Major Revamp.

 

[j00ster]

haha ok fair enough, theres nothing wrong with something being simple though. The drumfills i can see ur point but its drum software im not entirely sure how to use, as far as the "guitar play from a 7th grader" i could come up with something completely over complicated and it wouldnt suit the song.

 

[old.Tohtori]

haha ok fair enough, theres nothing wrong with something being simple though

No not at all, but this wasn't even good in a simple way.

You just are too caught in the drumfill, guitar fill thing and use them a bit willy nilly to brake the drumming, when it doesn't need a brake.

Basicly...

It's too simple(all around) to work without singing, and the timing and choruslines of the singing is poor to say the least.

It may have potential, but it will take a few years.

 

[j00ster]

Fair enough , just bare in mind i dont have the equipment / software to make an extremely accurate recording. Its more as a rough idea (the riffs are not repeated but played all the way through the recording) so sometimes timing is an issue.

 

[[slim]]

tbh your drum fills are way too early .. they need to end when your chord changes back to the start of the riff...other than that enjoyed it ^^

What software do you use to record your music?

 

[old.Tohtori]

Oh forgot to say that take what i say with extreme self awareness and only as an opinion and hard criticism. Otherwise you'll want to shoot my head off through me rectum

 

[j00ster]

Oh forgot to say that take what i say with extreme self awareness and only as an opinion and hard criticism. Otherwise you'll want to shoot my head off through me rectum

Hehe its ok i wouldnt of started this thread if i didnt think id /wasnt prepared to get critisism.

btw Ive kinda updated both of the files again , got a pop sheild today so redid the vocals and changed some of the guitar parts.

Cheers

 

[[slim]]

What software do you use j00ster???????